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Blue part one

"Do you believe in fate?"

It had been a long time since the words had been spoken, but Andrew still remembered them. "No," he answered, as he always did, "of course not." No-one heard him. "Don't you believe in freedom?"

"I believe we all have choices - but that fate throws us opportunities, and rewards us if we take them," his memories continued.

"So you're saying if we don't follow our fates we're doomed to lead our lives in misery and suffering? That is not freedom. It's coercion."

He waited for his memories to answer, but they were silent. Everything was silent. Perhaps he sealed his own fate, after all, with those words. A life of suffering. His chest ached. Panic flooded his body. He fought to keep still, to relax, but his body craved air, and there was none here. He could feel his control slipping away, floating with the jellyfish. He could almost see himself as the jellyfish saw, a man drifting downwards. He could see his eyes become unfocused as consciousness fled, as the darkness around him closed in on his mind. Helpless to prevent it, he could see his lips relax, his chest heave to bring in sweet, fresh air - and instead brought in sweet, fresh death. His body struggled, but there was no oxygen. It was over.

Through eyelids that had almost closed; within a body that had no more energy to struggle; in a mind with no choice but to accept death - there was a glimmer. Eyelids crept open for the final time. It was there, just in front of him, and too late, too late. Death and darkness came.


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Feb. 3rd, 2010 04:13 pm (UTC)
Yay! I like how water/death is the big theme so far.
Feb. 3rd, 2010 06:59 pm (UTC)
It does seem to be heading that way! Perhaps it's just because we're such morbid people. Actually, mine is based on an idea I had for a story many, many years ago, and anything I had on it has since been lost in the mists of hard disc failure.
Feb. 3rd, 2010 07:18 pm (UTC)
Aw, lame! But recreation can bring some way more awesome ideas into the story than you'd have previously thought of, to be optimistic. I do enjoy a story beginning with a death, as opposed to ending with it.
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